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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 3:32 pm   Reply with quote

BRILLIANT!!!!!!!! Nice job, Dementio. Wink
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 5:05 pm   Reply with quote

This is the first fan fic to keep me this interested in a long time. Keep up the good work, I can't wait 'til you make the next episode.
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 6:38 pm   Reply with quote

Thanks for the positive feedback, everyone. I present to you... the next chapter!

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DAY 1: Trekkers

After collecting all of the contestants that jumped from the bus, Jeff noted the state of the bus, and reasoned that it wouldn't make it to their proposed camps. He made an executive decision to make the camping spots on the nearest plains, which were just over a mountain.

Mewtwo decided to be a jerk and teleport there, leaving everybody. He found himself on the plain, with nothing to do but wait for his comrades.

MEWTWO: Hmmm, passing over that mountain must be rather dangerous. Hopefully a few of them will not make it. Maybe... maybe I could hurry that process. Muhahahahaha!

We see the 15 castaways, Jeff, the Driver, and the Guide trudging up the mountain. They are on a thin walkway on the side of a cliff face.

Mario hurries and catches up with the guide.

MARIO: Excuse-a me. What is a-the name of thees mountain?

GUIDE: Sarhdarac.

MARIO: Oh. Never-a heard of it.

He falls back to where Luigi is walking. He fakes collapsing. Luigi picks up his brother and carries him. Mario smiles.

SAMUS: (mumbling) Makes me sick...

MR. G&W: Beep-beeper.

Under her helmet, Samus smiles at Game and Watch.

Link and Ganondorf walk up the mountain looking at each other out of the corners of their eyes.

Fox and Falco are arguing.

FOX: No, you can't take a picture of a black hole, are you a moron?

FALCO: But with sonar, man!

FOX: Just shut UP!

Ness has to run to keep up with the group, as his legs are much slower than the others. He uses his Psi powers to keep himself from having a heat stroke.

Falcon walks easily along the small ledge, carrying Peach who is using her umbrella to shield them from the sun. He strolls past Mario, still being carried by his brother. Mario scowls at Falcon. Falcon doesn't get it and gives him a thumbs up.

FALCON: Nice guy, that Mario.

PEACH: I guess...

Bowser lags behind the group along with Ganondorf, whose abominable speed slows the rest of the group.

Zelda trips on a rock. Falco catches her. She smiles at him, and Link curses under his breath.

Kirby's body, lacking nourishment, shut off the use of Kirby's legs, and he is being dragged by Donkey Kong, who felt bad for him.

Suddenly, a strange look appears on Link's face. Mario notices.

MARIO: What is eet?

LINK: There is a fell voice on the air!

JEFF: It's MEWTWO!!!!!!!

Rocks fall from the mountain top and crash down around the castaways.

Far away, Mewtwo stands on a hill top with his hands outstretched, reciting lines never read.

MARIO: He's-a trying for-to bring down-a the mountain! Meester Jeff! We must-a turn back!

JEFF: No!

Jeff extends his hands and speaks equally cryptic lines.

Fox and Falco dodge rocks with their blinding speed. Ness uses his Psi-Shield to protect himself, Mr. Game and Watch flattens himself on the cliff face. Bowser retreats into his shell. Falcon protects Peach by destroying the rocks with attacks. Link raises his Hylian shield, and Ganondorf just stands there as rocks break on his head.

Jeff's incantations seemingly do nothing.

FALCON: We must get off the mountain! Make for the Gap of Katmandu and take the west road to my city!

JEFF: Your city, Falcon? You live in the future on a continent that hasn't even been formed yet.

FALCON: (shrugs) Just a suggestion.

MARIO: No! The gap-a of Katmandu takes us too-a close to Tanzania!

A rock crushes the Driver, whose body falls off the cliff.

BOWSER: If we cannot pass over the mountain, let us go under it. Let us go through the mines of Zimbabwe!

A rock falls and rolls into the Guide, pushing him off the side of the mountain. His screams fade.

JEFF: What the hell are you talking about?! We will continue forth.

The mountain does not defeat them, and they come off of the other side, tired and hot. Jeff parts from the castaways, who are now completely on their own, and heads for his private camp.

The players are then split into their two tribes.

Tribe Iwata consists of Mario, Ganondorf, Link, Peach, Fox, Mr. Game and Watch, Samus, and Kirby.

Tribe Miyamoto consists of Luigi, Zelda, Falco, Ness, Mewtwo, Donkey Kong, Falcon, and Bowser.

The contestants finally reach camp.

TRIBE MIYAMOTO

They come upon Mewtwo sitting under a large plate-like rock hovering above him, providing him with ample shade.

MEWTWO: I trust you had a safe journey, friends.

(Silence)

MEWTWO: Good. Now we will divide up the job assignments. Falcon, you will carry out the menial- (Falcon is asleep).

The Pokémon looks around and sees that all of the castaways are asleep.

MEWTWO: Wha... you can't just... but I... FINE. We will outline camp duties after regeneration. Hmph.

Mewtwo enters a regenerative state.

TRIBE IWATA

They all crash as well, not bothering to try to set up camp. Ganondorf and Link sleep as well, but are always ready for an assault from the other.

Mario tried to snuggle with Peach, but she is too wrapped up in an autographed picture of Falcon. She sighs heavily as Mario fumes.

Meanwhile, Samus and Game and Watch strike up a thoughtful conversation. Samus, through the use of the universal translator on her suit, is able to understand G&W's beeping, and realizes that he actually has much to say.

Eventually, they are all asleep.
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Ah ha ha... feedback is always welcome. I feel so much creative juice flowing through my magical veins, I can't help but write more... so it's likely there will be another chapter up later today. Until then... ciao!
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 6:44 pm   Reply with quote

Nice foreshadow about Samus and Game & Watch at the end.

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 6:46 pm   Reply with quote

Nice Cool

I can tell Samus and G&W are going to get along




hopefully >_>
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 6:48 pm   Reply with quote

This is excellent.
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 6:53 pm   Reply with quote

Very well written and overall excellent. As a Super Koopa of Lemmy's Land, a fan-fiction site with I don't know HOW many Survivor stories, this would rank among the top 3. Congratz.

P.S. Just a wonder, are the challenges going to include guest stars? I could think of some decent ones off of the top of my head. But, of course, it is your story, and I will not invade on it like a wolf on a vulture-torn carcass.
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Celeste Dimentia



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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 6:55 pm   Reply with quote

Ah, Samus and G&W... well, stay tuned. Heh.

And thanks, Mister I... but there aren't any guest characters really planned to appear, yet. And I don't know if I'll ever have them. I have a lot of different characters to develop, and that's one key thing that I wish to focus on in this story - development of the characters that are integral to the plot. This is their wild and crazy struggle, out in the wilderness. Cool
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 6:59 pm   Reply with quote

Ah, that's nice. Just was wondering if Pikachu was going to help Jeff out or something. It'd save a lot of fan complaints.

Just keep on going with it. Smile
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 7:03 pm   Reply with quote

Jeff runs pretty good for a total nerd. So far, he's my favorite character.
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 7:16 pm   Reply with quote

"Jeff's incantations seemingly do nothing".

XD

Anyway, nice chapter.
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 9:13 pm   Reply with quote

Heheh, thanks. What's a story without humor? No wait, don't answer that. Confused

But anyway, I think I'll start working on the next chapter now!


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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 10:00 pm   Reply with quote

Yess! Must c more jeff.
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 1:00 am   Reply with quote

I present to you... the next chapter! Yet again!

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DAY 2: Uncle Mewtwo's Cabin

TRIBE MIYAMOTO

Mewtwo emits a soundless psionic buzz, rudely awakening his fellow tribemates. They rise groggily as Mewtwo delivers the terms of their coexistence.

MEWTWO:... And that covers everyone. I expect to have the preliminary lodgings completed by this afternoon, before the immunity challenge.

FALCON: Wait a minute. Y'know, I just realized something.

MEWTWO: What is it, you buffoon?

(Silence)

FALCON: (Everyone is waiting) Wait! I lost it.

MEWTWO: All the better, now!

FALCON: No, no I got it! I don't want to be your servant!

EVERYONE: YEAH!

MEWTWO: Ah, dissension. Yes, I foresaw this. Well the solution is simple. I don't care. If you do not carry out my orders as I have presented them, I will inflict great harm upon you, the likes of which your mind cannot fathom.

The tribe looks at each other.

NESS: You can't take us all!

MEWTWO: Oh, I assure you, small one, I most certainly can. And I will have to if you do not commence with the private sauna construction immediately!

SHEIK: Fine then, we'll just put up with it for a few days, then vote your pale behind outta here.

MEWTWO: Hmmm, it would seem that you would have that option. Well then, I guess we will simply never lose an immunity challenge.

SHEIK:... Damn...

MEWTWO: (maniacal laughter)

The tribe members get going with their chores.

TRIBE IWATA

The tribals are trying to make breakfast, using G&W's frying pan. They have great difficulty, however, because the pan is completely flat, and nothing can be placed on it. Link spends about an hour trying to balance an egg on it.

LINK: Blast this infernal flat-man and his useless contraptions! What good are ye, He of No Depth?

MG&W: Beep-beepity, beeper.

SAMUS: He says that although they may seem pointless, his tools have hidden applications.

G&W flicks his black wrist, and from the flat pan magically springs a flat, oblong black item. It flies at Link and he catches it. It scalds his hands and he drops it, yelping.

LINK: Argh! Wait, permit me one moment. (Link runs behind a rock. There is a long hissing noise. After a moment, he returns, sporting his Goron Tunic)

SAMUS: (Looks for a moment) Did you just spray-paint yourself?

LINK: Nay, Lady of the Armor. (The spray-paint is running) Er... uh... Flat-sir! Let fly with another, posthaste!

He does, and Link catches it deftly, waits, and takes a bite.

LINK: Hmm...

MARIO: Ees dat a sausage?

FOX: Looks like bacon.

LINK: Tastes like Cucco.

Ganondorf harrumphs and looks away.

The tribe feasts on the strange delicacy, and there is silence.

The night slips by, and much is talked about.

TRIBE MIYAMOTO

Mewtwo is overseeing his tribesmates' work. His white brow furrows. There is a strange presence in his mind... he can't quite place it, but something is... blocking him.

All of a sudden, there is a yelp from Luigi. He is caught under a fallen log.

LUIGI: Mama mia! Gimme some-a help here!

The others rush over, and strain trying to lift the log, but to no avail.

ZELDA: Mewtwo! You must help him!

MEWTWO: Mewtwo-what?

ZELDA: (sighs) Mewtwo, the grand and supreme ruler of all life on this world and any other.

MEWTWO: Precisely. (He floats over to where Luigi is trapped and pulls at the log with his mind) Be sure, fellow tribesmates, not to mistake this for compassion. I save him only that he may toil in the name of...

FALCON: NOW!

Bowser leaps behind Mewtwo and wraps his arms behind him.

MEWTWO: What?!?! Insolent worms! How dare you!

FALCON: That's right Mew-Zero, now we have you right where we want you.

MEWTWO: But... why couldn't I read your minds?

Falcon points up, and Mewtwo follows his finger to Ness, who is perched in a tree, concentrating really hard.

MEWTWO: Damn... clever...

Falcon winds up.

FALCON: FALCON...

MEWTWO: ... But ultimately misguided!

FALCON: PUNCH!!!

Mewtwo musters enough power to push Ness' barrier away and teleports himself from Bowser's arms. The Falcon Punch connects with Bowser instead, and he flies across the ground, leaving a fiery trail behind him. As he fades, distant trees snap and topple. Mewtwo appears behind Falcon, meshes his hands, and smashes the pilot in the spine. He crumples. Luigi shoots himself like a missile at the Pokémon, but it is easily sidestepped, and Luigi finds himself embedded in a tree. Donkey Kong yells and leaps at Mewtwo. He claps his mighty hands around Mewtwo, but he is instantly gone. For a moment, Donkey's simple mind fathoms that his strike completely destroyed Mewtwo. He is still smiling about it when Mewtwo's energy beam rains destruction on him from above and pushes him deep into the ground. Falco launches a kicking attack at the rampaging creature, but Mewtwo just catches his leg and throws him at Zelda. They are both knocked unconscious.

Mewtwo sighs with pride at a job well done, but remembers Ness. The young boy jumps down from the tree and faces Mewtwo. They stare into each other's eyes for a moment, equals. Then the fight ensues. We see nothing but the two standing there, but in a place not covered by our senses, an epic war is fought.

Finally, Ness falls simply to the ground.

Mewtwo looks at his mates, groaning and wheezing.

MEWTWO: Well, this little mutiny will not go unpunished. Half rations this evening (groaning) and you will all work through the night (loud groaning). You fools. Treachery requires no mistakes.

The rest of the day and night are grueling for everyone in Tribe Miyamoto... except for Mewtwo.
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I might have another chapter up some time tomorrow. Hope you enjoyed the latest installment!


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PostPosted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 1:07 am   Reply with quote

Nice!
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