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A small (fairly dark) piece of writing.
 
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rawrskey
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PostPosted: Thu Jun 12, 2008 10:30 pm   Reply with quote
Not particularly meant for anything, or to imply anything. Just an uninspired description of some very creepy place.


Code box because I like this thing called formatting. If you don't like green on white, paste it into a notepad file with word wrap on.

Code:
   It was a dark building. A small rodent darted by on what was left of the open floor, the rest of it being littered with rubble and corpses. In the corner of the room was a small flickering fluorescent light dangling from the ceiling by a single chain, lighting up a small portion of the wall. On the wall, written in bright red lettering, barely legible, is the word "why."
   Deeper into the building screams of pain can be heard, but are cut short mysteriously. Footsteps are heard sporadically, along with radio static. For a moment, there is nothing but quiet... no footsteps, no screams, no static, no humming of the light... and then it is broken with a gun shot. Then there is no more sound, and no more sight.
   The single dangling light crashes to the ground, shatters, and ceases to work. The screams of pain are no longer heard, the footsteps have stopped, the radio static no longer breaks the silence. There is just silence, and darkness, and the haunting question: "Why...?"
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rawrshop    
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Francine



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PostPosted: Thu Jun 12, 2008 10:34 pm   Reply with quote
Really descriptive, puts you right into the room, though it's not somewhere you'd want to be.
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The Shop on a Hill    
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 13, 2008 2:48 am   Reply with quote
I enjoyed it, and felt it was descriptive and well-written.
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The Black Citadel    
Djacwmwfin
Joshamuffin
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 13, 2008 11:29 am   Reply with quote
I can ask the question "why" right now also.



WHY DON'T YOU HAVE 50 NOVELS PUBLISHED BY NOW?!?!?!?!


Seriously. DO. IT.
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