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CFH Ligador
Joined: 20 Jan 2008 Posts: 5136
HP: 100 MP: 6 Lives: 2
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Posted: Sat May 17, 2008 1:35 am
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That's actually the name of the creation. I named it "bored". Basically, it's a mediocre piece of text I'd like to call a poem.
Well, here it goes.
Three-thrithy in the morning And I don't bother to write But boredom weighs on me And it's extremely annoying
So I'm making a poem As lame as it can be As uninspired as I am As boring as the situation
Each line is terrible But they take a while I'm smashing my keyboard With my head On frustration Bitter frustration
I listen to this tune About this guy Who was in a terrible life But suddenly it all flips And how the world spins And puts all in its place
I dunno what to describe now Maybe the clock ticking Tick-tock-tick-click Every second goes by Under my eye I cross my arms and sigh That was lame.
Alas, this poem is lame Lame game always the same I can't even come up With something that Makes any sense at all Without breaking the whole Damn ryhthm.
All right, I'm done. You had enough of lame. _________________ My siggy is original. |
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Super ShadowArticuno
Joined: 10 Jun 2007 Posts: 29080
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Posted: Sat May 17, 2008 1:41 am
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Yeah, I skimmed over it, and it was pretty good. It had a varied rhyme scheme, making it a lot less childish than a simple ABAB type of scheme. Mildly entertaining, even at 12:30 at night where I live. It got a little repetitive with the word "Lame" though. |
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Para
Joined: 19 Jun 2007 Posts: 7631
HP: 99 MP: 6 Lives: 1
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Posted: Sat May 17, 2008 1:50 am
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...Iiiiin West Philadelphia, born and raised -shot-
Nice job. |
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