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Super ShadowArticuno



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PostPosted: Sat May 17, 2008 1:58 am   Reply with quote

I lay awake. That’s all I could do. It was burning hot, even for a spring night. Pathetic.

The world seemed to go against me that week. I cast it upon myself, of course, screwing myself up to a point of no return. If only I could go to sleep… I was so damn hungry, warm, and annoyed.

It’s funny how those things work out, though right? You win some, you lose some, then you lose more until you win enough to pay for what you lost. Like the universe has something against you.

The visual stupidity flashed on the television screen. Disgusting. People actually find this funny? It’s not. If anything, it’s degrading to anyone with a true sense of humour.

My fingers flew across the keyboard with a light tapping noise. If my father caught me up this late, he’d have my head. The only reason why I hadn’t gotten off of my lazy ass and heated up myself a taquito.

Anything but this would be fine. My father and his ogre of a woman upstairs, doing who-knows-what all night… It brings a nauseous sensation to me, just thinking about it. I was still burning up.

How stupid was this? I had no freedom. I was a prisoner in my own home. Abysmal. Disgusting. He wouldn’t care if I were on fire as long as he had his cat and his log of a girlfriend on his couch. His son could starve to death. As long as the cat’s dish was full and the cow was next to him.

I often wish I had never been born for these reasons, but why should something so small lead me to such disgraceful thoughts? I had no right to believed this. I had it made for the time being. I never had to do anything but put up with life and do my homework. I felt sick believing I had to resort to such childish, depressed thoughts just to find an excuse feel sorry for myself.

I’ll get over this all eventually. I might as well take my chances with that microwave…





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A Bucket of Stuff    
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PostPosted: Sat May 17, 2008 2:12 am   Reply with quote

Good job. It gets the message straight, and descriptive enough to be interesting.

I, though, think you went back with some ideas already done and there could be more ways you could characterize them. Example, your dad's girlfriend.
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Super ShadowArticuno



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PostPosted: Sat May 17, 2008 2:20 am   Reply with quote

Feh, I'd go into further detail, but I doubt you want to read about such a useless, annoying log.
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Tails Doll



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PostPosted: Sat May 17, 2008 3:22 pm   Reply with quote

Depressed, and stuck in bed, huh? I'll admit it. I have to resort to drastic measures to go to sleep.
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