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ERECTIN' A DICK
Miku Hatsune
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 16, 2009 9:46 pm   Reply with quote

Anyways, I need to get into writing more. ಠﮯ๏
Anyway:


___Chapter One___

Looking back on that faithful day, I never really though I'd find happiness. But I have. It started long ago, I was but a simple boy, with carefree dreams, such as getting a wife, and raising children with that wife. Unfortunately, I was out on walk one day and fell down a narrow cliff. I blacked out. When I came to, I noticed the most beautiful woman I had ever seen. However, unlike me, she was human. And I was from the Tribe of Darkness. But, I knew at that moment, that I loved her. And...She loved me back. It was a most wonderful feeling. I was content with life. Her name...Was Lady Timpani. And I wanted to be with her forever.

Timpani and I started seeing each other at the spot that I fell to. But, our kind just wasn't meant to be... But that didn't stop anything.


___Chapter Two___'

After a while, Timpani and I saw each other more often. But...My father had found out about us one day. He told me to stay away from her... I told him yes, but I actually said never in my mind. The next day was blank, my dad had the area spectated. No one could enter or leave. But... Timpani must have been very sneaky and quick because she made it past the guards, and up to my room. I was happy once more. But... It didn't last, my father heard a noise and rushed in my room and found her.

Then.... He did an unthinkable act of hate.... He banished my dear Timpani from the world...


He ended her game....

___Chapter Three___'

So there my father was...Standing before me. With an angry but calm expression on his face.

I was shocked. And then I was fill withed rage. I ran past him and into the Altar of Darkness, and there it was. The Dark Prognosticus, I grabbed and in an instant, I, Count Blumiere where dead. Not physically, but mentally. Before I killed my father, he muttered something about sparing his life. I didn't care. I didn't care about anything. I had become an evil man know as Count Bleck. "Bleheheheheh. Spare you? Never says Count Bleck!" And in that instant I killed him. His scream was satisfying, but not satisfying enough. Every world had taken Timpani from me. So they deserved to be destroyed. As I left the Tribe, the members attempted to stop me. Fools. I dispatched them and their children as well...


I did not care. Not anymore. My father was foolish, so I ended his game.

___Other chapters coming later. >:U___' ಠﮯ๏ ಠﮯ๏
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 16, 2009 10:23 pm   Reply with quote

...This is more like a drabble, to be honest.

It can barely be a decent fanfiction if the chapters aren't even a decent length. ( More than a few paragraphs, obviously. )

...That's all I have to say -- I like it, but it needs to be written better.
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