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[Popple]

I made a rough sketch of the first comic.

I'm going to take it into PS when I can make some time and clean up some of the drawings and ink it over. Might do some flat coloring too.

No dialogue yet. Numbers where text should be are placeholders for the speech I had written below the panels.

Also think I'm going to add one more small panel at the bottom.

[Lord Bob]

Looks cool.
The last panel is my favorite.

[Francine]

You should try to make it more clear that the final panel of the dude screaming is indeed the final panel since it could be easily mistaken as the third according to this layout. And if the shot where the guy is talking to the dude on a horse from above a gate will include a speech bubble, you should move the guard over since the bubble will appear cramped if he's snug in the middle.

And I'm not sure if it works with the tone of blue used in lined paper, but I know that the lines are easily Photoshopped out. But I think simply scanning it under grayscale would save some time by avoiding that step.

[Popple]

[Frozenwinters]

You need to stop drawing on lined paper, it makes things too distracting. White paper is fine, and you could always just add lined paper texture later.

I can't tell what's going on, but that's just because I fail at comics. The drawing is pretty good.