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Strawberry-san
Celeste Dimentia
Joined: 03 Jul 2007
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 Posted: Mon Oct 15, 2007 10:16 pm
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Twenty shall enter... One shall leave...
-PLOT-
One evening after a long day of brawling, Mario checked his mail. Apparently, he and the other Super Smash Bros. had won a mansion!
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Wait a sec... When did any of them enter a contest?
-CHARACTER STATUS-
Mario - alive
Kirby - alive
Link - alive
Samus - alive
Sonic - alive
Snake - alive
Meta Knight - alive
Yoshi - alive
DK - alive
Ness - alive
Diddy - alive
Ike - alive
Wario - alive
Bowser - alive
Peach - alive
Zelda - alive
Pit - alive
Pikachu - alive
Pokémon Trainer - MIA
Fox - alive
-CHAPTERS-
1: Well, isn't THIS familiar...
Last edited by Celeste Dimentia on Sat Oct 20, 2007 1:37 am; edited 4 times in total |
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Kero Neko
Greenlight
Joined: 05 Aug 2007
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| Posted: Mon Oct 15, 2007 10:28 pm
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So, like your other smash bros. survivor fic, except in a mansion, and all except one shall die? I like it, chu. Just please don't abuse pika too much. (kill my trainer) |
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Strawberry-san
Celeste Dimentia
Joined: 03 Jul 2007
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| Posted: Sat Oct 20, 2007 1:33 am
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- CHAPTER 1: Well, isn't THIS familiar... -
SETTING: EASTERN BOO WOODS
Mario: *walks up to huge mansion* Whoo! What a hike... this IS the right place, Samus?
Samus: *she and Sonic are holding a map* 155 East Boo Woods?
Mario: Yep.
Sonic: Then we're here, Chunky Thighs.
Mario: That... was uncalled for.
Sonic: Do you want the truth, or lies? 
Mario: 
Sonic: ... Never mind... 
DK: OOK! OOK! (CAN WE JUST GO IN?!)
Pokémon Trainer: Yeah, guys!
Sonic: *To DK* Alright, alright!
Pokémon Trainer: What about me?
Sonic: *not even paying attention* You guys hear something?
Samus: Nope.
Mario: Nada.
DK: Ook. (Not a thing.)
Pokemon Trainer: HELLO?!
Sonic: Oh, dude, THERE you are. Come on, Pokémon Trainer, stop dragging your feet. 
Pokémon Trainer: But I've been here the whole--!
The others were once again on the move, ignoring Pokémon Trainer.
Pokémon Trainer: GRRRRR... *eyes flicker red*
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Sonic was the first to step inside, followed by Mario, DK, Samus, Kirby, Link, and last - AND least - poor Pokémon Trainer.
Sonic: *whistles* Pretty sweet pad you've won us, M!
Mario: ... I didn't win it. Kirby was the one who entered the contest, right Kirby?
Kirby: Poyo? (Contest? Was there food involved?)
Sonic: Well, SOMEBODY here won it, right?
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Sonic: Heh... right?
SLAM!
Samus: THE DOORS!
CLICK!
Link: THE LOCK!
Samus tried to force open the door.
Samus: Ergh... it... won't... budge!
Sonic pushed Samus aside.
Sonic: Step aside, little lady. Let a hedghog handle this. SPIN DASH!
The familiar KEEEEEE was heard as Sonic charged up and rammed the door. All he got--
Sonic: Ow...
--Was a bloody headache, like a hangover from Hell.
Sonic: ... Bugger.
Mario: Guys... I'm actually scared, here.
Kirby: Poyo. (Somebody hold me.)
The lights flickered.
Sonic: ... SON OF A--
The lights went off. There was a scream in the dark.
???: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHH!
The lights fickered back on. Something was amiss...
DK: Mario... unga-ook? (Mario... how many people did we come in with?)
Mario: Seven, DK. Why?
DK: Ooka-ook... (I'm counting six...)
Samus: EEK! Where's Pokémon Trainer?!
Mario looked to where the young trainer had stood. All that remained was his Pokéballs and a puddle of blood.
Link: Guys... look.
The blood spelled a message.
Blood Message: HELP ME!
To be continued... |
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Kero Neko
Greenlight
Joined: 05 Aug 2007
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| Posted: Sat Oct 20, 2007 8:13 am
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Really good, though a bit more detail about what first happened in the mansion would have been better. Anyway, if I were Mr.I I'd rate this, but since I'm not, I'll just say please continue, chu. |
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wat u say
Ph1r3 Mario
Joined: 01 Aug 2007
Posts: 6727
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| Posted: Sat Oct 20, 2007 8:40 am
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This is awesome. Continue, plx. |
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The Axolotl Sympathist
Geno
Werewolf
Joined: 26 Jul 2007
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| Posted: Sat Oct 20, 2007 8:46 am
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Where are the Ice Climberz? |
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lolz
Shrowser
Joined: 16 Jul 2007
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| Posted: Sat Oct 20, 2007 9:38 am
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This is truly amazing. |
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Sind
Vampire
Joined: 01 Oct 2007
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| Posted: Sat Oct 20, 2007 10:08 am
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KILL NESS!!!!! |
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Token Nazi?
Zelnor
Joined: 01 Jul 2007
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| Posted: Sat Oct 20, 2007 10:19 am
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More novel style, please. Your selling yourself under worth and sound like a bad fanfic. Yes I know it is a fanfic. Else, good work.
EDIT : By the way, A) Samus could be CHARGIN HER LATZER and light the mansion, Link has a sword and bombs, and samus has missilies. Also DK has giant monkey arms of death, so why not jsut blast the door ? Of COURSE running against it doesn't work. Also, has anyone tried using the handle ? Locks click all the time. |
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wat u say
Ph1r3 Mario
Joined: 01 Aug 2007
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| Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2007 8:27 am
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| Sind wrote: | | KILL NESS!!!!! |
>_>
<_<
*Stabs you off a cliff*
And I think I know where PT went...
Kinda. And Continue, plx. |
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